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40.It is better to go to university far away from your home-town than to continue living with your parents (Сочинения ЕГЭ английский язык)

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Some people claim that live far away from your native town during a study at the university is better than live at home with parents. At the same time, others disagree with this statement. I would like to express my opinion on this issue.

I agree with the point of view that it is better to go to the university far away from your home-town than to continue living with your parents. First of all, it can teach you to be independent. You will start cooking for yourself, doing a house chore and being responsible for all you actions. Moreover, you will get more a personal space to express yourself. Since a lot of mothers and fathers are trying to control their children, their preferences about clothes, spending free time and others things, therefore live apart can help to solve this problem.

Nevertheless, we can find a contrary opinion.

Some people are argue that it is greater to continue live with your parents during a study at the university. Your family can provide you with the opportunity not to spend time on anything other than studying, thus you can be focused on learning.

However, I cannot agree with this opinion because it is inevitably that children will grow up one day and a moving out from the parents is a good chance to become older.

To sum it up, I would like to say that there are different points of view upon this issue, but I stand my ground that live far away from your native town during a study at the university is better than live at home with the parents.

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К1 – РКЗ.2/3

Your family can provide you with the opportunity not to spend time on anything other than studying, thus you can be focused on learning.(Нарушение нейтрального стиля. Не нужно использовать личные местоимения You/your..)

К2 – организация.3/3

К3 – лексика.2/3

Some people are argue that it is greater to continue live with your parents during a study at the university.(it is better)

Your family can provide you with the opportunity not to spend time on anything other than studying, thus you can be focused on learning.(anything else)

it is inevitably that children will grow up one day (inevitable)

К4 – грамматика.0/3

Some people claim that live far away from your native town during a study at the university is better than live at home with parents. (To live / living)

Moreover, you will get more a personal space to express yourself. (неопределенный артикль "а" не нужен).

Since a lot of mothers and fathers are trying to control their children, their preferences about clothes, spending free time and others things, therefore live apart can help to solve this problem.(Living)*+2

Some people are argue (Some people argue)

..than live at home with the parents.(with parents)

К5 – орфография и пунктуация.2/2


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