Nowadays we can't imagine our lives without the Internet. Some people think that it is the biggest evil of our time.The others do not agree. Who is right?
On the one hand, the Internet is a great help for us. It is also a large source of information, which makes our lives much easier. Secondly, he Internet helps to communicate with our friends and relatives, who live far from us. It is also an opportunity to make new friends of interest.
Other people say that the Internet takes much time. Most of people are ready to spend hours in front of the computer. These people get addicted to it. It is also said that there are too much useless and dangerous websites, which can mislead you in your life or even rob you of money and life.
However, I disagree with this opinion. Firstly, it is not the problem of the Internet, but the problem of people who cannot allocate their time. THat is why these people really waste time. Secondly, it depends only on our choice, what sites to visit.
To sum it up, I would like to say that the Internet is not the biggest evil, as everyone should choose themselves how to use their computer and the Internet: for real need or only for entertainment.
Nowadays we can't imagine our lives without the Internet. Some people think that it is the biggest evil of our time.The others do not agree. Who is right?
On the one hand, the Internet is a great help for us. It is also a large source of information, which makes our lives much easier. Secondly, he Internet helps to communicate with our friends and relatives, who live far from us. It is also an opportunity to make new friends of interest.
Other people say that the Internet takes much time. Most of people are ready to spend hours in front of the computer. These people get addicted to it. It is also said that there are too much useless and dangerous websites, which can mislead you in your life or even rob you of money and life.
However, I disagree with this opinion. Firstly, it is not the problem of the Internet, but the problem of people who cannot allocate their time. THat is why these people really waste time. Secondly, it depends only on our choice, what sites to visit.
To sum it up, I would like to say that the Internet is not the biggest evil, as everyone should choose themselves how to use their computer and the Internet: for real need or only for entertainment.
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Два аспекта не раскрыты. Во вступлении автор не перефразировал тему. Есть нарушение стиля - риторический вопрос.
и разговорное really в заключении.
Во втором абзаце отсутствует мнение автора.
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Логическая ошибка. Фраза “с одной стороны неуместна в opinion essay. Следовало начать с In my opinion, ...-. First(ly), … . Secondly, ...
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friends of interest - friends with similar interests
Mislead you in your life - mislead you
allocate their time смысл противоположный получается, лучше manage their time
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Most of people
everyone should choose themselves how to use their computer and the Internet: for real need or only for entertainment. - everyone should choose how to use their computer and the Internet: for real needs or only for entertainment.
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Secondly, he Internet helps to communicate with our friends and relatives, who live far from us.
THat is why these people really waste time.
To sum it up, I would like to say that the Internet is not the biggest evil, as everyone should choose themselves how to use their computer and the Internet: for real need or only for entertainment. Запятая перед as не ставится.
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